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You turn me around.
Night stretches until it overflows
and leaves a fleeing moon.
Your teeth hurt my lips.
While drawing a smile,
that translates into the song of the universe.
Clover falls in love with grass.
Your foot catches on some,
against earth just watered.
The breath rising from the bottom of your chest.
Wakes up my hands,
uprooting desire to discover your hiding places.
All my words.
Shaded now by verbs of sex, tenderness,
fiery colors that cannot be extinguished.
Woman, mine.
In this hour of October,
that escapes towards seized fortresses of November.
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Give me your fruit, the hollowed arc of your back.
Your tremble, when my hand clears strange clouds
that cross your line of sight.
Give me your blood that boils.
Strained between cells,
producing the symbiosis of you and me.
Intense moments of fused flesh.
Awake in miracle of naked yesterdays,
time stops astonished by the scene of bodies without souls.
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you've been looking too closely
at the oily stains |
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well it was actually pretty good.
just felt a little long
for one of them romancing poems.
the best starts with "clover".
save those "you"s and "yours" for special occasions.
its a risk they'll wear out... |
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 10/8/2008 5:11 AM |
a teensy bit over the romantic top, 'song of the universe,' & 'symbiosis' not my favorite for a poem, but just enough of you to avoid the sentimental. i'd say, a poem to your mate filled with love and tenderness. of course this part -- Your teeth hurt my lips -- i could sort of identify with. except, my teeth, gums, hurt the cavity of my brain. s. |
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I love that word mate, it almost sounds cavemanish
"Moonlight and love songs
Never out of date.
Hearts full of passion
Jealousy and hate.
Woman needs man
And man must have his mate
That no one can deny."
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i'd love it if somebody wrote a poem like this for me. |
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 10/8/2008 11:09 PM |
Play it, Sam. Play "As Time Goes By." i recorded this one, but couldn't find the right midi. and i still need help converting the whole shebang to an mp3. i need another innie/outie connector then i can do it myself. i have all the other necessary programs. :) |
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| | | From: ^~JustL | Sent: 10/11/2008 4:21 AM |
oh king of song
was she a warrior
a princess
or an entity?
yes, somehow to define love
in any form
is like biting your own teeth.
cheers
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the opening stanza grabbed me (and as I rarely feel the need to edit anyone else's work) it held to the end Stella |
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nice to know I, or should I say the poem,
grabbed you and held on,
thank you |
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