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| | | From: ack (Original Message) | Sent: 10/18/2008 7:35 PM |
loneliness
it’s
how
others
view
u
but maybe
not
how
u
view
your self.
Martys
blouse.
Bukowski
Joseph Beuys
Celine
Carver
some famous people
craved
it
like
something
to
attain
or be proud
of.
if u do truly feel it
remember
life
is
just
a
practise
for
death
and in death
we
will
only truly
find
it
forever
over many eons
that will go
on
like
a forever cheap
job
lunch
break
with the same sandwich.
so now really
is
the
only chance
we
get
to
practise
it
fine tune it
welcome it
praise it.
but then again
even the
co-operation
of
dancing
fools
can
be
welcome
if
u
r
at the
end of your
tether.
it might
even
give
u
something to laugh
about
even dancing fools
have
a
purpose.
and laughing can be better
then
money
sex
and
power
any
day.
be a holy
sinner.
find
laughter
in
true
desperation.
true
loneliness
is
just
another
word
for
being
human,
this strange
condition
we all seem to have,
but most
fuck it up.
maybe this is
the
only
time
we
ever
get
to
be
truly
alone
and
it
can
be
wonderful.
no questions
no having to explain
no small talk.
just u
the 4 walls
and lousy neighbour’s
who play sod all
like we were dead already.
and a
desperation
it will never
change,
as
if.
just one lousy
bum
being
the
only
lousy
bum
he/she
can
be.
without ever going out
again,
after the attacks.
shit !
even
lousy bums have a purpose
but
I still need to
find
mine ?
or maybe I have,
thinking is a lost
art.
but I am all for it
without the
bull.
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It could be your deodorant, Ack. I know you're a Brit so if you're near Leeds market there's a stall selling Umbro spray for only £1. Apparently |
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lunch
break
with the same sandwich. You need to mix it up a bit. Alternate. Pasty one day, sandwich next. Pork Pie Tuesday, Tin of soup Wednesday. Do you change your undies regularly?
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 10/19/2008 5:41 AM |
i can't even read it. i immediately went to the comments. i suggest ack copy all of his works of pretend genius on these boards. they might get lost in the "migration." s. |
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| | | From: ack | Sent: 10/19/2008 4:58 PM |
| i bought my first deoderant last week-what a palaver ! |
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carver said it most succinctly
Vodka chased with coffee. Each morning
I hang the sign on the door
(well there more after that, but less succinctly)
bellchap, your string-bead lines do express a loneliness (maybe so severe, that few will take the time to follow it to the end.) i took a look at the poem and figured it was "loneliness"
when i came to the second 'u', i knew that it was in fact "loneliness" and by reading further i would come to the same conclusion. loneliness.
ive found that its an admirable subject, loneliness, silence, or nothing-happens, that sort of thing. but i also think there needs to be a kind of tension, however slightly, a shadow of the text, something weary or awkward, or otherwise something that is not in the writers head, looming, unknown, for it to become interesting. the difference between jackingoff and lovemaking. know what i mean. this was a jackoff. but you can write, no doubt. write like theres no tomorrow.
i think you know what i mean.
actually i went a little further, and was intruiged by "Martys blouse". i thought aha, here it comes. here is the mystery. but then it didnt pick up on it, work it over. instead a list of writers and some stuff about what things are, knowledgable things. martys blouse is the opposite of such a knowledgable thing.
anyway. something like that. a piece of advice |
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