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Overtones Crescent
Omni-present
Lol and drop the tone
Down and over the zone
of time
The art is mine
& the measure, our own
Scale down
Trip on the bar
Here comes the eight…
Resounding saxophones
& overtones
Blues to the bone
All alone
Away from home
On a bus on the way to town
What to see
On an amazing journey?
Doubtless shadow
That is the real me
From that look in your eye
What a time we will have!
Samba slow
Swinging so-so low
Dance in a trance
See-saw the sitting easy chair
& tap your foot and sway
Do you hear it?
Drop a line from the bass on down
See the bar trill to your touch
It isn’t much, but
Oh! What a beautiful sound! |
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chris, you are music, man. keep singing! crow |
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 12/9/2004 8:22 PM |
i used to use this font & color. i discovered it doesn't work. but it is legible. favorite line: Lol and drop the tone well, hate to say this -but- besides being behind the eight ball here, it's all beatless to me. s. |
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 12/12/2004 7:18 AM |
i didn't realize this was on Metacrit. so if there is something specific - let's talk about it. every day, i learn a bit more. on some days, i learn lots of bits. i'm slow, it takes time to sink in. if this is a joke, i'm not laughing. s. |
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Ok, so what makes it beat-less? |
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 12/12/2004 7:58 AM |
from the words, this appears to have some type of blues melody in mind. (or a mind of its own) & in jazz - somewhat atonal to begin with - the measure is 12 beats. may be beatless, but not breathless. work on meter. the rhythm is fine. but rhythm is different from meter. susan |
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 12/12/2004 8:12 AM |
basic definitions - is it o.k. to start with rhythm's definition (from Bob's Byway)?
rhythm is measured by the metrical unit.
jeez, somehow i think i'm gonna hear about the 'arses' a lot. among other stuff. :-(
RHYTHM An essential of all poetry, the regular or progressive pattern of recurrent accents in the flow of a poem as determined by the arses and theses of the metrical feet, i.e., the rise and fall of stress. The measure of rhythmic quantity is the meter.  Sidelight: A rhythmic pattern in which the accent falls on the final syllable of each foot, as in the iamb or anapest, is called a rising or ascending rhythm; a rhythmic pattern with the accent occurring on the first syllable of each foot, as in the dactyl or trochee, is a falling or descending rhythm.
Sidelight: From an easy lilt to the rough cadence of a primitive chant, rhythm is the organization of sound patterns the poet has created for pleasurable reading. (See also Ictus, Modulation, Sprung Rhythm)
(Compare Caesura) |
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 12/12/2004 8:14 AM |
| Freudian slip, i'm sure. :-( |
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| | | From: _susan_ | Sent: 12/12/2004 8:16 AM |
i use syllabic counts a lot. and throw in a goodly portion of Caesura dressing. |
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It was actually the rhythm I was working with... I wrote it while listening to John Coltrane's "The Promise", so I was kind of going with that, and the free-form idea behind my poetry. |
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I don't usually work with any specific meter unless I'm writing a song... |
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do i have a deaf ear? i achouli herd a beet. crowlolololo |
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