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Creative Writing : Road trip to hell...
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From: MSN NicknameJust_Jess_too  (Original Message)Sent: 12/16/2007 12:42 AM
 Windshield wipers mark the beat
 as we drive along
I look at you in the drivers seat
and tune to a better song..
 
I want to talk I want to see what is it
that you think
the silence here is just enough to drive
a girl to drink.
 
The interstate with greyness stretched beyond my line of sight
just seems to take the silent time
into the edge of night..
 
we still have lots of miles left to say whats
not been heard.
but you just stare ahead without the slightest
hint of word
 
it's how it's been forever now
why would I think you'd change?
It's me that needs to readjust or maybe
rearrange....
 
 
twenty five long years I wait
for you to open up
instead you sit across from me
and sip your coffee cup.
 
Can you hear my thoughts or groans?
My struggle in this car?
I've just decided this will be
the last time we go far...


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From: MSN NicknameJustCall_Me_JoeSent: 12/17/2007 2:39 AM
Not only the beat of the wipers, but, the measured beat of the verse work together to reinforce the passing of your subjects life spent waiting Jess... I once went on a thirty year journey just like that...
 
You've certainly got a way with words Jess...

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From: STARSent: 12/17/2007 10:26 AM
Perfect in every way & Joe speaks for me!  A wonder read about a sad subject.

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From: MSN NicknameJust_Jess_tooSent: 12/17/2007 8:09 PM
true story.....lol....hubby and i took a small road trip to the other side of the state the other day...6 long hours of silence..drove me mad..drove me nuts...i was ready to scream...lol....its always been this way..no talk..no interaction....just the radio and the windshield wipers..i cant go another road trip like this...gotta be a better way lol....
 
                                          JJ

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From: STARSent: 12/17/2007 8:13 PM
Awww (((JJ)))  I have sort of the same situation, but for different reason.... Sidey really needs to see an audiologist....

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From: MSN NicknameJust_Jess_tooSent: 12/17/2007 11:29 PM
aww have him see one..my step dad just got his new hearing aides after much pushing from all us kids and hes so happy....at nearly 80.....he regrets not doing it sooner...they really are miracles..he no longer talks too loud..and best of all he can hear us ....
 
    as far as hubby...hes been this way forever..must be part of his sickness..he just never will talk while driving...you can say something or ask him something and he sits there..then ill say..hey did you hear me..answer me and he gets very angry and says......i did answer you............so..in his mind he thinks hes talking but hes not.....make sense?  too weird..i cant read in the car i get kinda sick..so i look at the scenery..and make up lil stories or think of poems..sing with the radio..anything to pass the time...oh yea..i prolly chew a whole pack of gum too...ok nuff of this...didnt mean to go on so...lmao
          JJ

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From: MSN NicknameẄỉtçђ�?-©Sent: 12/19/2007 7:34 PM
jess u are blessed
please
what do they say
"one mans junk is anothers' treasure"
 
mine would and still doesnt shut up
on and on
 
trust me...........after a non stop
jabberer wouldnt you appreciate
the silence
 
lol
 
good writing

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From: peejaySent: 12/20/2007 3:58 PM
I've too have been on that highway.. thankfully I discovered books on tape, and an alternate route. LOL
 
good luck!

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From: MSN Nicknamesnappinella67Sent: 2/3/2008 8:57 AM
a very nice poem.. sad subject matter, but thats what makes it.
 
Sad that it makes you this sad though. Im sorry he doesnt talk to you Jess.
I bet your dying inside sometimes. Been there done that, I wasnt married though.

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From: sarasaintukSent: 2/3/2008 2:18 PM
Jess
So eloquent. I'm good with words but more putting together work documents. Wish I could do something this beautiful.

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From: MSN Nicknamecbchopsticks1Sent: 2/24/2008 2:12 PM
I'm not a poem reader but this one is nice. i dated men who never shut up and also dated men who were non-talkers. i think i perfer the quiet ones. 
 
and on a road trip. bring a good book or a ipod
 
 

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