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| | | From: LittleBill (Original Message) | Sent: 4/13/2005 6:48 PM |
You don’t really know what you have done, do you ?
You didn’t just close a door, slam it in my face no,
no you did much more than this.
Remember all those
childhood dreams we were
so naive and full of hope ?
We were sure then
the Prince would come
rescue his Princess
from the tower, from the dragon
good would always triumph over evil and
true love conquers all.
Once, I was sure of this
but then you showed me
you showed me
what happens when the princess
wants to stay in the tower.
What happens when the princess
would rather face her dragons alone.
And then I looked and saw a queue
of twenty or more other jaded knights
in font of me and I turned to find
ten or more stood behind.
This is what you have done
you pulled the magic carpet from under my feet
I rubbed the lamp and no genie appeared
I clicked my heels three times
and all I did was get lost
everything I wanted to believe
all I held onto as a child
the very stuff that subconciously
kept me sane as an adult -
all of this you have destroyed
denigrating my charachter
weakening my faith as you
nonchalantly made decisions
that did not include me.
True, you showed me the Rainbow
and I climbed
and I climbed
to find my pot of gold, but hey
I wasn’t allowed
to take it with me
just a look... one touch... then leave.
This is what you have done.
So tell me, are you happy now ?
©lb05
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Hi lb, Simply the title pulled me in! - I recognised it from a song, lol, so was like humm...better see if it has any link. Most of this poem is kept 'simple' in it's langauge, which makes this part: everything I wanted to believe
all I held onto as a child
the very stuff that subconciously
kept me sane as an adult -
all of this you have destroyed
denigrating my charachter
weakening my faith as you
nonchalantly made decisions
that did not include me. amazingly effective. Using such psychological description alongside the way you've shown it with the 'fairytale' route works ever so well. You really do control the pace, the tone and the effect in such a neat way. It's not a poem which exaggerates and looks silly, it's carefully done. Great. Katy p.s typo - 'font' - meant to be 'front' I guess. |
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Good poem, lb. that's why we love children, they still see/believe in magic. Sadly we know it all to be fraud...and wish it weren't so. Steve |
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