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| | From: Satinbear04 (Original Message) | Sent: 4/17/2005 3:51 PM |
The stary night, The pale moon lit sky, As pearly tears fall from her eyes, And her lost soul cries.
Does she even know why? Does she know why she cries every night? Why her heart, And soul take flight, just for the night?
The sawing owl, The spying bat, Look over, Where the girl is sat.
How can this girl look so sad? She has a loving mum, Sister, And dad.
The lost girl wonders the woods of her mind, Feeling alone, Confused, As if she can only lose.
Her talent is abused, Answers she cannot find, As another mist of tears cover her eyes.... |
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Hi Toni, but eventually through the woods she will see a light, a beckoning that will call her - and then the tears will dry. Emma |
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| | From: Zydha | Sent: 4/17/2005 5:17 PM |
I think you have posted this one earlier (in a reply perhaps) and I liked it very much then also, Toni, a interesting use of rhyme in this one and the layout is perfect for the questioning matter. Sad, but well written. (And...lol, it suits 3rd person so well.) See my Behind Closed Eyes, I am one for taking fantasy flights when problemed, so again, another I can feel, Zy |
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What a sweet response thank you Emma :) |
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Yes Zy you're right I have posted this once before ina reply, but felt it needed it's own space for "judgement", and thank you once again for your kind compliments xx |
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