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| | From: LittleBill (Original Message) | Sent: 9/14/2004 5:47 AM |
Frustration’s sweat it bathe him grim
he knows not what’s inside of him
each time he looks behind his eyes
sees fire or ice one more surprise.
And then he’s up ! a kite in flight
a wise old owl that judges night
but pushing downwards as a snake
to writhe and scream with belly ache
and hapless creatures one by one
through misty veil he does become.
Yet turning slow on scars of back
his heart does pound with love attack
and calls to heaven out her name
for gentle hand to steal his pain
quite unashamed this hero bare
with naked soul for her to share.
©lb04
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Hi Lb, the fickle nature of love in this poem. Emma |
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Phew, lunch time........this sounds like a close up look at life lb and yes....full of surprises...love the line 'for gentle hand to steal his pain'...another great poem Valerie X |
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| Thank you Valerie and Emma for commenting on this. : )lb |
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| | From:  Zydha | Sent: 9/15/2004 9:48 AM |
Again, one of your 'not quite on the surface' poems, lb, I do find this one either scynically sad or a little disappointed....in life? or love? or himself? Like the wording though, it has you written all through it, Zed |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 9/15/2004 9:49 AM |
That doesn't sound right, lol It has your style stamped ...sounds much better, Zed |
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| Thanks Zed.....I do like being stamped...lol...not intended to be cynical tho' I guess that too is part of my style.... : )lb |
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Another LB classic That left me smiling. Mark |
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| Thanks mark...smiles are gratis...cos they make me smile too. : )lb |
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S'ok Zed.... a gentleman enjoys and remains silent. : )lb |
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