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| | | From: LittleBill (Original Message) | Sent: 9/17/2004 11:54 AM |
Darkest Night This is tough I’m feeling sick just can’t breath my head’s so thick the wild heart beats one thousand times but I find no reasons only sad, bad rhymes. Too far apart long distance aches cold blood can’t flow if the body breaks. When the mind is blank the brain cells cry they’ve no air to take the well’s run dry and the painful chains pulling to the ground tethered like a slave feeling duty bound but there’s no escape only time to kill and the witch’s claw is scratching still at the tearful eye she demands the right and I long for light in this my darkest night. ©lb04 |
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This is a very dark and serious poem for you LB Its a serious read and I think I need to see it more before I comment on it. |
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Yikes ! Mark, now I feel like I'm on your couch ! Take your time my friend, I'll be interested in the 'verdict'...lol : )lb |
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Hi lb - I hung out all day to discover Marks analysis of you - it is one of your blacker poems - and one does sense a sort of desolation in this - but it is definitely you - please Mark the verdict! Emma |
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| Hi Emma....why wait....don't we all know I'm nuts ?...lol...yes indeed one of my darker poems but have no idea where it came from, it just kind of flowed out onto the page. Thanks for reading. : )lb |
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 Wow LB that is absolutely amazing! And I love it! Black poems always manage to take me in, I kinda get dragged into the words and this is brill! Lv Fluff. |
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| | From:  Zydha | Sent: 9/18/2004 7:08 PM |
Fed up waiting for Mard to post his verdict, lb....this is strangly familiar to me...don't know why, unless in some of my nightmares! lol Seems a lonely thought, though not certain if it is specific or metaphorical, but I do like it...very much (I have just questioned my comment to you about you having a style, but this proves your diversity in writing) Zed |
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| Thanks fluffy....I do enjoy getting one of your WOW's...lol....glad you liked it. : )lb |
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| Hi Zed....actually I'm not sure I want a verdict...lol....thanks for reading.....and btw it's nothing specific....it just came out this way : )lb |
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