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This now, was thrown into; circular light dots and spots, pushing, poisoning, disgusting this black lolling liquidity; moving with a solid stink. Whilst spying, guarding it, all gasp�?/FONT> not only, singularly, just that circular light thing; additional splats try to inhabit, killing off, this last part of liquidity. ©K.E.M 2005 |
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| | From:  Zydha | Sent: 10/15/2005 9:51 PM |
Mmnnn..science lab??? mercury? Pollution is too obvious. Dear Katy, you are making my mind ache tonight, lol, now remember...this was a fast reply, so if wrong don't tell me, but you doing it....innovative! Zy |
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Hi Zy, It's about what I was talking about in that e-mail... (*warning* will now explain what it's about!) It's written from a photograph, a black and white one where the black water seemed to be ruined by the white splashes, and my thoughts were that the liquidity may be affronted by this. Total reading into, of course, but I am loving just been able to move away from the subject and play with the words. I don't know whether you noticed what I've left out of this? I think I have told you... I hope you don't mind. Katy |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 10/18/2005 2:35 AM |
Mmnnn....I remember your email, Katy, and what it was about, but spot the time, lol, my mind is just giving up, as I have been catching up on reading and replies, but...tomorrow... I shall return and see if I can spot what you have omitted. (don't tell me till I give up, if I have to) Zy And no....of course I don't mind at all, Katy. |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 10/18/2005 2:39 AM |
Oh, I forgot, Katy, well done. I don't know into which page you enter the corner, but your 'Hot steaming drink poem' made Poem of The Week this week, and I think it really deserved it, Zy |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 10/19/2005 4:42 AM |
Ok, I have reread your mails, Katy, and they do not give me a clue as to what is missing, lol, so go on ... tell me...please. One thing, Katy, and I don't know if this was intentional, but as I reread this piece time and time again, there is a definate kinetic quality about it, a very natural movement within your subject matter, almost as you did with the 'hot drink' piece, Zy |
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| | Sent: 10/19/2005 10:56 AM |
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Hi Zy, I think I must e-mail to explain this properly. The thing missing is the letter 'e' - I will explain why later, like I say. The thing about the kinetic quality is sort of an absolute for how I wrote this and why... but the hot drink thing wasn't so forced - I think I am just into movement at the moment, Sorry for such an insufficient reply, Katy |
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Hi Clive, I'm trying to move away from wanting to give my reader a specific picture and a parcelled meaning to go with it - just trying new approaches, being unhappy with old ones, I suppose. Thank you for your comments; they're insightful, sometimes as a writer it's difficult to see your work from the outside. Katy |
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