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New Poetry Pge 5 : Painted Grey (oldie!)
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From: MSN NicknameBouncing_Fluff  (Original Message)Sent: 10/14/2006 2:23 AM

Painted Grey

You snatch the purity

From a once so flawless complexion.

The lines on your face tell a story,

Page upon page of empty words

That mean nothing to me anymore.

Still, I read on like a child,

As if, somehow

I’m mesmerised by the tales

Of an enchanted life.

They are laced with wonder

But shadowed by truth.

 

In those pictures my smile is drawn,

The smile of a little girl

Who used to be me.

Now she is gone and I see

A faded portrait

Of my face, painted grey

And a blank canvas,

Awaiting the day

When you find it in your heart

To paint me into your pictures

Once again.

 

The palette is bare, your brush gone dry,

And yet, a finished portrait hangs

Proudly on the wall.

I see two, but there are three;

If you remember back in time,

When that little girl smiled

The innocent smile

That could melt the coldest of hearts.

Her portrait faded long ago,

Gathering the dust

Of a lifetime.

 

But when the story’s ended,

And the pictures are bronzed and torn,

Remember it was me that you painted grey.

 

©2004 Fluff.

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Hello all, I thought I would post some of my old stuff just out of curiosity as to what you think lol. This piece was written when I was 15. Thanks, Fluff x



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From: MSN Nicknamemakhala334Sent: 10/14/2006 2:43 AM
great imagry Fluff

the third one? is the mystery

moving - touching - you

best,
m

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From: MSN Nicknamemakhala334Sent: 10/14/2006 2:52 AM
Audio - please?

m

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From: MSN NicknameZydhaSent: 10/14/2006 9:14 AM
A great analogy for when one's inner self takes on it's own identity, Fluff, this is indeed a very moving piece, one of a child struggling to balance the act of another's behaviour.
 
This is really a one for audio as Mikhail suggests, but I fear it may be too long, but would you give it a try, please, love, Zy x

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From: MSN NicknameVocalDixSent: 10/15/2006 10:49 AM
Truly a moving piece Fluff.  Excellent write for one so young too.

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From: MSN NicknameBouncing_FluffSent: 10/15/2006 2:10 PM
Hello all
 
Thank you for all your wonderful comments - they are all much appreciated and I do intend to try this on audio when I can find my microphone lol and pluck up the courage to actually do it lol.
 
This was written about my Grandmother and the way she treated me compared to my two younger cousins, which was a very difficult time for me because I didnt understand at 12 years old. Shes still the same today, but Im not particularly bothered anymore.
 
Thanks,
 
Fluff x

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