I like this layout much better, Cara, there is clearer emphasis

 

when the reader has to take time to enjoy each line,

 

and still love your words, Zy

Thanks Zy for rereading.

I cant believe I posted the first one lol

dont know where my head was.

Cara

Hi Cara,

 

I like both versions, but I think that the revised one is much better. So much clearer. A great write!

 

Poetess

xx

Poetess you are too kind

Cara

I like the rewrite. The poem flows much easier allowing the reader to absorb each line.  Great work... bear

Thanks Bear for re-reading.

Cara

I like the rewrite too Cara for it flows easier to read.  Made me think of the past six years, where I reparented myself from abuse from my father, and I too played roles to be what someone wanted me to be to be loved, and lost myself.  Had to find me and learn to love me.

thanks Dix