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| From:  Merlin--_--_ (Original Message) | Sent: 10/3/2008 2:44 AM |
Undefeated Pound and crash - hammer and smash;
Life’s brutal fist and fate’s cruel lash.
Flesh will hold sound for another round.
Bring on harsh hammer and bring on its pound! Can’t you see that I’ll never bend knee?
I’ll writhe in the dust but never I’ll plead.
Broken and torn I’m weary and worn �?BR>There’s nothing you can inflict that cannot be borne�?/EM> Would you care to die as I spit in your eye?
You’ve crippled this body but you don’t know I!
I’ll stand up to meet, once more on my feet;
My fist in your face as you crow my defeat. For deep inside this bruised punished hide
There’s a voice to push all crude hurts aside.
A voice that’s behind and beyond this mind;
A voice that none but I can find. You’ll never cease and I’ll never lie�?BR>So bring it on then - let one of us die! There’s a voice you can’t hear and a face you can’t see -
An untouchable voice that’s forever me. Merlin Copyright Gordon A. MacIntyre, October 2008 |
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This was an emotional outburst...a deep hurt that shows...a verse that needs to be read more than once... Great job of scripting Merlin, Maria  |
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This was very powerful Merlin, the spirit inside ourselves that won't be defeated or crushed I think this is what brave men always have in their hearts
Emma x
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Wow, Merlin x With a spirit like that you will never be defeated xx Such a powerful piece, and angry too, I feel Jen xx |
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Merlin... I really do admire your alliterative and rhymical work.. That was superb... loved it to bits.... well done from k |
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A very powerful poem, Merlin. It reminds me of someone being mugged. A horrendous experiance a friend's son had recently. |
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| | | From: kayano8 | Sent: 10/4/2008 2:38 PM |
I could just see you laughing in the face of adversity saying 'Bring it on' It fair bowled along Merlin great job sir..x |
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Er.... I'll hold yer coat then shall I ?  |
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Turn your back for a second...! Sorry, guys, I've been away. This was a hasty write and I didn't expect such a response... Hi, Maria. My muse was sulking and then spat this out. So - Yes. An outpouring. But in a good way I hope? Thanks.  Exactlty so, Emma. The spirit inside.  I'm not happy with the title "Undefeated". I'm toying with "Inside", but  . Answers on a postcard? Thanks for the vote of confidence, Jen! Not quite "angry" (although anger had a hand in penning this, I admit) ... More a ... focusing ? of energies when push comes to shove... Thank you so much, Ken! I love playing with how words sound, so your opinion gives me a real boost. Thanks, Val. Life can feel like a mugging sometimes... Seriously though, I trust your friend's son came through ok? Cheers, Kayano. Yup.  "Bring it on!" Sometimes, if you can't laugh manically what can you do? Good man yourself, Steve! I owe you a pint for that, I believe...  (Just don't nick my wallet, though! ) Thanks again, everyone. Merlin |
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wow skillfully executed your words convey a great deal of inner strength StellaR |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 10/9/2008 1:22 AM |
This is another write I have been back to a number of times, Merlin... I love the adjective 'surging' and this does that to me each time I read it. Your wordskill is to be admired, Zy |
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Thanks, Stella. Strength, or just plain stubborn?! Thank you, Zy! An impulsive write, and I'm flattered that you've been re-reading it. "Surging" may make a better title?? I'm really not sure on "Undefeated" at all... Merlin |
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