Hi Zed....a nicely written piece, I've read it a couple of times with both options....and they both work.....but for me 'kill' just about gets it. As you say, a difficult choice. Good poem : )lb

I love this Zy and I must admit as I was reading it I fully expected the word Kill to be the ending, I was surprised by thrill,  I understand your quandry but, I think Kill is the better word here.  Great piece though, I wrote one about a spider years ago for my youngest daughter Louise, she was a blood thirsty little horror I'll have to dig around in my archives and see if I can haul it out. love Val xx

Thanks everyone for your reactions, strangely, 'kill' would have been my first choice but with the two words coming at the same time....I veered away from the darker mood.

 

I shall have a try with your suggestions, Lincus, this was a very early morning  spontanious 'straight on to the screen' sort of inspiration, so obviously I will play with it for a bit. Mnnnn, yes, another choice in line two of the last stanza, will elimanate my quandry in line four, thanks all, Zy

Mari, you read something in the poem I hadn't even thought of, but now I see what you mean...the www would be appropriately in context with thrill...interesting, I love when a poem goes in more than one direction, Zy

 

 

Hy Eva, I'll email details, it was still in box last time I looked but the new posts will probably kick it out soon.

 

Yes, I will still try a few alternatives as Lincus suggested, as I just got up so early...(like a reverse late night, lol) and I  wrote this off the cuff so to speak, so I shall take it to word and fiddle with it, but I kinda like the context and metaphor of kill. It can be a spider's web, or just life's feelings. It was pouring with rain early this morning and I just thought of how the webs look after rain in the garden. I will bring the couple I have posted here for you. But, I have a few in word which I haven't finished completely, as I'm checking out tribes and locations, now I have a reason to spend time on them. Thanks for your kind words, Eva, night, Zydha

Hi Zydha

 

I hope you don't mind me commenting - but for me the word kill works far better - it is a beautiful poem, but I felt that thrill let it down as an almost anti climax.

 

Take care

 

Emma

Of course I don't Emma, that's what it's all about and...it would appear you are with the majority, thanks.

 

Yes, I think I do too, I'll probably still play with it for a bit, but I think 'kill' seems to fit best, hahaha...don't forget, it's quite new to me too, lol. Thanks for your comment about it, Zydha

Hi Zydha

 

I read it a few times with both word and I have to agree with Emma, thrill was a bit of a let down, I like kill at the end too...

 

Julie

xxx

Thanks Julie, it would appear unanimous then...so maybe I won't even play with it any more. I write some dark stuff and sometimes if it goes that way but an alternative occurs to me...I am never sure which way to go. This was one of those quandries.

 

                                  Zydha x