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From: MSN Nicknamewildestscarletsunrise  (Original Message)Sent: 4/26/2004 6:03 PM

Coma

 

“Why have you got to be so sarcastic all the time?�?/SPAN>

“What are you on about?�?/SPAN>

“Back there you making those digs, you are so rude!�?not to mention embarrassing!

“Oh shut up, they’re just a bunch of idiots!�?/SPAN>

“Those are MY friends!�?Watch the bloody road will you�?�?I>you’re going to get us both killed one day!

“Just shut up, if you don’t like the way I drive get out and walk…friends? They’re all a bunch of pretentious prats…�?/SPAN>

“Slow down for gods sake!!�?Shit!!!

“Making me look like a fool! And you’re just as bad as…�?/SPAN>

“GOD�?NO!!!!!!!!!�?I> God help me!

 

She dreams of sirens,and half opens her eyes.

Oh god�?Am I dead?

Where.Oh no……�?help me

It hurts so much

She slips back into her dream.

Sirens fading.

 

What is happening?

Why can’t you hear me?

PLEASE!!!

Why are you crying?

Why can’t I keep……�?/SPAN>

Awake�?.the black envelops her, she is pulling at the tubes coming out of her nose.

Carried away by fragmented memories.

Mummy!! Come and find me!

She is seven years old and hiding behind a tree in the woods, she loves the picnics they have.

Mummy?? Come on and find me!!

Where are you Mummy?

Confusing her past with her present state.

Why can’t you find me? MUMMY!

I’m lost…�?

 

She can hear voices, one is her Mother’s.  She tries to speak.

Mum?  Here I am!! I’m here.

Why can’t you hear me?

You can’t see me? Can you?

I can’t see you!

 I’m here!  PLEASE HELP ME

I can’t move

 

I’m scared.

I can feel you touch my hand

I feel so tired.

 

“I’m glad you could come!�?

Her friend Jane looks beautiful, like a princess, she is getting married today.

She is smiling.

The black comes again, sweeping over her.

 Jane, you look so beautiful!

Doesn't she Rob?

Why has he got to be so bloody moody!

She hears footsteps and a kind voice saying

"I'm just going to give you a quick wash."

Where am I?

I can’t stay awake, please where is Rob?

I don’t understand,

Please help me get out of here

I’m stuck I can’t move!!

PLEASE WHY AREN’T YOU LISTENING TO ME!!

Ouch………it hurts!

 

“We are gathered here today to bring together Jane and Richard�?�?/SPAN>

“You can go to the bloody reception if you want, I’m off home!�?/SPAN>

"Rob! Please, why have you got to make it so bloody awkward, go home if you like�?you’re no fun anymore anyway."

 Where is Rob?

We were at Jane’s wedding.

Mum she looked so beautiful!

I can’t remember!

I wish you could hear me!!

I love you too mum, I really do

Don’t cry!!! Please I’m here

She gives a very slight and weak squeeze of the hand.

 “Nurse!!�?

Why are you calling a nurse? Mum, are you ok?

Footsteps, more voices and another tide of emptiness overcomes her.

 She is at Jane’s reception, dancing.

She feels so happy, a bit merry, and too much champagne.

I am so happy for you both!

I wish Rob would cheer up.

He is sitting on his own at a table.

I love this song.

Rob come on…�?

She grabs his hand trying to pull him up

Come and dance!!

 

She tries to half open her eyes

"Oh please Rob!"

A car door slams

"Stop it!!"

“Just get in the car!�?/FONT>

Why are you shouting at me?

�?/EM>What? You mean you don’t know!�?/SPAN>

"Rob!!"

She floats in and out of her dream, pulling at the tubes. Writhing around.

Why have you got to be so sarcastic

Please God make him stop

Slow down for Gods sake!

You’ll get us killed.

HELP ME!! PLEASE!!

OH NO!!!

 

Black, she sinks back into her unconscious state, breathing through a machine.

 

Copyright.JT03



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