Susan, I usually try to dish out some criticism to be fussy etc but with this one I can't. Its got something special. For a start the rhythm is a delight, weaving between rising and falling rhythm, the line breaks helping it along visually; 'will' echoes along its length too and keeps it fluid and ringing with the 'L' sound, so that when you mention the lakefront, it is there.. L is the water sound. neighing in the grass is good too, the poem is a world in itself and we accept that strangness more as a delight than a strangeness.

Nothing concealed at the end finishes by taking L down into D... your intentions are formed in sound as well as meaning. My hat would be off if I wore one.