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| From:  Mindmanuk (Original Message) | Sent: 2/1/2008 9:53 AM |
The silence afterwards, has been so loud That I retreated in comforting crowds Lost in memories Lost in time Too many obstacles waiting and lying A bit more of me A bit more of you Are we just in transit Always passing through? Like heaven in a moment Like a chocolate in the dark Like a sip of Champagne in a moonlit park And then this space this crawl of a pace This dead time of nothing this senseless taste I miss you You miss me But is is this missing Enough? 1/2/2008 |
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"Like heaven in a moment Like a chocolate in the dark Like a sip of Champagne in a moonlit park" oh Mark this is a very soulful and deep write. I especially love that stanza above. Good work! |
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Well, I guess it is unanimous, the same stanza touched me too... Wonderful work, Mark... bear |
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| | | From: kayano8 | Sent: 2/1/2008 7:53 PM |
And then this space this crawl of a pace This dead time of nothing this senseless taste ooo Mark a very moving piece indeed....xxx |
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I enjoyed the write, found it sad, I hope everythings going well for you...great expressive words... Maria  |
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Wonderful, if a little sad.
Melody x |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 2/2/2008 12:32 AM |
I see you (c) this piece for todays date, Mark, wonder when you wrote it. Quite a change of mood from your more recent writes, hope all is fine. Liked all stanzas, but the two commented on are also my favs, well scribed, Zy |
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