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From: MSN NicknameSirNicolas4  (Original Message)Sent: 6/18/2008 3:06 PM
 

I rent my life, by the day, nothing more

A room where when conditions are right

The view is breathgiving-in crystal clear light

On long misty gray days my vision is poor

It is then my baggage arrives like a gypsy curse

and a whisper- not mine-it could always be worse

say menus slipped under my paint-chipped door

that the fare aint worth the high price I pay. 

Only while walking the dim Inner hallway

 My reflecting self echoes, revealing much more.

No dialtone questions its all who I know

No machines telling me nothing is free�?/P>

hinting everyone knows my number but me

with no ears to hear, where do the lies go?

I, the river of me, never steps into the same me twice

As I drip thru the the floor plan and flaws in the ice

through a hard world Liquid me will silently flow.

I know The Rent is never low; it’s sand that shapes my ocean,

As it polishes beach glass smoothed by soft motion

each piece joy, sadness; til I wave from below.

 

I shoreline smile for the whole damn thing

then come to Silence…seeing simply my soul

a battle-scarred baby, grown, never quite whole

in a backyard stadium, as sweet angels sing.

Those perched and preening angels await

Having all read the book, they all know my fate

Which me will I be whoever I bring? 

Still They wait on the crumbs- thumb up or thumb down?

Will the new child go round Buddha’s merry-go-round?

And if one-if –by-thumb, the thumb of which king?  

 

Will Allah glare “Infidel!�?and not wave me through?  

When Jesus bled for me just what did he know?

Buddha smiles inward- hey bud, can I go?

Am I saved, or will my lease come due

Be, Still. Ask Him�? Or Him�?.or Her

Will Jesus stop bleeding, or worse yet not stir? 

No doubt to be Evicted as the me I knew,

As though there was one me, yet I hold on so tight

If the glass bag is bulky, being mine makes it light

Seems we all are related- can you relate too?

Or maybe its more like an old photo tin

or wormfood, then birdfood, salted to taste

As back up we go, as recycled waste



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From: MSN NicknameneverCominHomeSent: 6/18/2008 6:27 PM
I've already read this through several times...there is a rhythm and flow to your language that comforts the reader while you slip in unexpected delights like "...breathgiving crystal clear light..."  that sent me to Donne's notion of the interanimated souls who meet on the ether...his famous conceit.  Breathgiving...interanimation...it's an amazing thing to ponder... we all want to be breathgiving don't we.
 
Kudos to the poet

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From: MSN NicknameSirNicolas4Sent: 6/18/2008 8:01 PM
jen,
 thanks so much for your input. i have 3/4 versions of this, all uniquely different and can't land on any.

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From: MSN NicknameJewel2u22Sent: 6/18/2008 10:50 PM
Nic I love this
I'm not a writer but really enjoyed this one, it flowed so nicely in my mind.
also made me think....where do those lies go?....
and the ending made me smile
thanks great job!
 

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From: MSN Nicknameswitchgears1_Sent: 7/8/2008 10:44 PM
Heavy stuff, Nick.
I too, read it more than once and got something different each time.
 
Good work.
 
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