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Apathy I lost my dream My shadowed hope Hung suspended On a rope <o:p></o:p> Contorted, swinging From a tree It was tied up In my apathy I left it there Knotted to sway Picked up my mind And walked away. <o:p></o:p> ©jthorne04 <o:p></o:p> |
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Hi Val They are scary feelings too.  but I am glad you like it, thanks for your comments. Mari |
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Hi Mari I think you just described how I feel sometimes. A great poem, with a sadness echo. Take care Emma  |
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Hi Mari, I love the way you did this. The short sharp sentences work really well. Scary ...? Yes...but with a touch of defiant hope too....very good. : )lb |
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Hi Emma Thank you for your comments, I am glad you liked it, but sorry that you have felt this way too, maybe we all do from time to time. Mari |
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Hi LB, Thank you I am pleased you like it, it is true too that I can be defiant, but it is the fighter in me.lol. I was thinking about what you said about trying to make my pieces like this longer and am going to have a go, will probably be a bit abstracted too. Anyway thanks. Mari |
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Hey Mari......abstract is so cooooooool !  |
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I really like this! Sad, but not without hope and it flows really well. Hopefully you will find or have found new dreams and hope, hanging in another tree and just gently falling down towards you as you walk past. I also really enjoyed your poem "All Washed Up" - brilliant writing! Eva  |
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Hi Eva Thank you for your lovely comments and for reading. I am feeling a bit happier now, but thank you.  Mari |
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Hi Zy, Thank you for reading and for your comments, i am sorry though that you can identify with these emotions, but sometimes I think all of us feel this way. Thanks. mari |
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