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| From:  iampooh2 (Original Message) | Sent: 8/29/2005 10:57 PM |
At the moment this one has no name... suggestions and comments accepted... hugs, pooh Ever felt invisable- totally unsen- That is how I feel- when you're here with me- As if I do not count- or have any of your heart- Totally ignored in silence- abandened and alone- Left here in the dark- of your empty hollow heart- I am drained and exhausted- I have nothing left- Just this cold empty pit- that was my loving heart- 8-28-25 Pauline A. DeCou |
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Pooh, This was very sad, the thoughts of how alone a person feels even when with someone. For a title - I had several come to mind when reading this An Empty Shell Abandonment The Essence of Loneliness Hugsssssss Sassy *S* |
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| | | From: Mindy | Sent: 8/30/2005 6:40 PM |
Dear iampooh,  Such saddness I felt when reading this heart breaking poem. It took me back to a time when I did not realize that the world is so large and full of lonely hearts, that it is a waste to pine for one who does not return the sentiment. For this reason, an appropriate title for me would be... Worth More Than She Knows. I wish you love and happiness, as you already possess great talent.  Warm Hugs, Mindy :-) |
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Thank you Sassy... I have desided to title it HOLLOW HEART... the suggestion of a dear friend... and exceptional poet... thanks Dale... |
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Thank you Mindy... Abandondment would have been excellent... that is totally how it feels... hugs, pooh |
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Pooh, this is the ultimate lonliness! To share a space with someone you love who has shut you out of their heart. I FEEL the emptiness of this write...how about "Empty Heart" for a title? Peace to you...Lin |
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| | | From: Anita | Sent: 9/1/2005 4:45 AM |
Dear Pooh, You have described in vivid imagery something that is so hard to endure. This is true aloneness....when the person you are with is not connecting with you. I have read the other suggestions for the name for this poem. It needs a perfect name for sure. Hollow Heart is a good one. I enjoyed this poem very much. It made me sad and the best poems make you feel, I think. Anita |
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Pooh, its no surprise that Dale came up with the perfect title! "Hollow" is the ultimate emptiness... |
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Pooh-Oh I hope you liked that title and your words are so kind. Means a lot to me and I look forward to more of your beautiful poetry. Thanks for being a friend. Hugs Dale |
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Thank you Lin your kind words mean a lot... hugs, pooh |
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Thank you Anita that means a lot to me... I have titled it HOLLOW HEART... hugs, pooh |
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Dale thank you for all your kindness, and encouragement... you are such an inspration to me... I don't write often but when I do it comes straight from my heart... I love the title I think it's perfect, again thank you... I wrote this and left it by the computer... my husband read it and says whats this... I said I wrote it... he goes why? I said it's how I feel... well it helped for a couple of days... but it's back to the same old thing again... oh well... it's coming soon I just don't know when... but I am going to ask him to leave... it will be hard... I do love him so... but he has no time in his life for me... and I don't do alone well when someone's there for everyone but me... hugs, pooh |
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