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| From:  mikhail34 (Original Message) | Sent: 11/4/2005 12:25 AM |
i fell so deeply in love with life i fell so deeply in love with life
i died
to see what i was missing
then
i lied to get into heaven
slid right through just like i use to
no one knew - ugh - nothing new oh - of course - i’m frazzled - don’t�?mind me
i’ll bet you wanted to know what it was like
to die
uh - it was a gas
let me tell you
to die for
oh
i made a funny i fell so deeply in love with life
i died
and why - uh
well i said i wanted to ‘see�?what i was missing
that wasn’t quite right
and
i said i lied to get into heaven
well
that’s not quite right either
they found me to be a non-believer
and flash me out - i - - - i i’ll bet you wanted to know what it was like
to die
uh - it was horrendous
like un-drowning - from the womb - you know
like when you’re born - only yer old and panicky
and struggling for - - - - - - - - - well - - - - - - - - air
there was nothing funny about it i hadn’t fallen so deeply in love with life
when i died - well - in fact - i hung myself
i was only missing love
then trust and companionship
i never got as far as heaven
slid right through to - - - - - - - not sure
no one knows - ugh - don’t�?tell - ok?
uh hey - look
love life - don’t worry - there are worse things - ya know?
huh? [nervous laugh] hu h
when it’s your time - you’ll know - i promise - then it’ll be grand
(after a bit of a struggle that is - but is over with quick)
like bein�?new - you know
regards, m |
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Hi Mikhail, A very original poem - quirky - I like it Emma |
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thanks Emma i'm in a very odd mood - making quirky a really neat word this one - like having a conversation with no one and with everyone simultaneously odd thanks for taking the time to comment Emma , m |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 11/4/2005 2:06 PM |
Hy Mikhail, I read this yesterday and I wasn't certain how to make a comment, but Emma has done it for me. Quirky, original, yes, but it also displays your emotions at the moment, so although I kind of like it's originality, I was wary of (perhaps) your inspiration, but you never cease to suprise us with interpetations of your thoughts/ work, keep it up, please, Zy |
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Thanks Zy my mood continues as my journey starts keep well - thanks for your unending support - it counts fairtheewell poets and friends, m |
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Hi, this is seriously strong work! I heard the voices and I heard your sarcasm. In this poem the tone certainly made it - it's wonderful, a piece to be really proud of. Katy |
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thank you Katy you taking the time to say what you say here is most meaningful thanks for taking the time to read and comment. mikhail |
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Hugely entertaing Mik...this looks like it could be done live on stage...I like.
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| ...nope....entertaining*......sorry...still on my first cup of coffee...lol |
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thanks Clive very different moods create very different work thanks for taking the time to read and comment, m  |
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tjamks lb  thanks lb i could use a cup or two -with Kahlua -   - hic m |
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i'll be flying somewhere alongside Peter  we'll have a long chat waiting for our next turn - LOL  thanks for commenting, m |
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