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| | From:  jennypoll (Original Message) | Sent: 12/15/2008 6:20 PM |
CONTROL FREAK IT WORKED FOR A WHILE, YOU PLAYED ME WELL
KNEW WHAT I WANTED, USED THE SOFT SELL
GOT ME HOOKED OR SO YOU THOUGHT
MOVED THE GOALPOSTS WHEN I WAS CAUGHT YOU TRIED TO OWN ME, TRIED TO MAKE ME YOURS
TO MAKE ME DENY WHAT HAD GONE BEFORE
TO MAKE ME SAY NO ONE ELSE WOULD BE
AS GOOD FOR ME AS YOU COULD BE YOU DIDN’T TRUST ME, WOULDN’T LET ME BE FREE
DIDN’T SEE WHAT YOU WERE DOING TO ME
ALWAYS THERE WHEREEVER I WENT
COULDN’T SEE MY LOVE WAS SPENT I WANTED FREEDOM, I WANTED FRIENDS
YOU WANTED ME FOR YOUR OWN ENDS
YOU BECAME MY BALL AND CHAIN
MY SHACKLES AND A GODDAM PAIN Rewrite for now �?Zy’s challenge Then I was angry, so angry
Caught �?spiralling down �?BR>Trapped unwittingly
By other’s expectations
Hit bottom and withdrew
Prozac packed, hid away
Not that he cared or knew
Or would ever understand Then, a friend was there to see
Things which were lost to me
Self �?rediscovered in poetry
Simply now …I’m free |
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Wow, Jen! I think the words "control freak" might be an understatement! But I'm pleased that you have good friends who helped you through it all. A powerful write!  |
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| That was one heck of a rock bottom,Jenny,but by heck you didn't half bounce up. |
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Thanks you two .....the other site we met on first helped me an awful lot as well, especially the threads we all got so involved in LOL. One particular person started me off on poetry again, and that made me see so much, and made me stronger .....xx |
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| | | From: kayano8 | Sent: 12/15/2008 8:09 PM |
Well Jen alls well that ends well...Sadly some are still in the situation you have described..powerful write. Stella x |
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Great show of self confidence and renewal...I like the way you accentuated the positive...well done. Mariaxx |
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Thank you for your comments, Maria and Stella, this was maybe a bit too personal to post, but as I was looking through my limited old stuff, the rewrite just happened ...as things do sometimes. Pleased you appreciated it ....x |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 12/16/2008 11:22 PM |
Too personal? In here, Jen? No, this gives a lgimpse at the Jen who survived, and the writer who has grown along with 'self', I thought the rewrite really excellent and a piece which carries the message in a more skilled and modern idium, thanks for posting both of these, Zy x |
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Hey, Jen. I think I know where you're coming from. I tend not to post personal writes, but sometimes something just flows and you post. I'm glad you did in this case, your final line says it all. Gordon |
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Most of my really personal writes are not for sharing (like you, Gordon)...although, as you pointed out, Stella ....all writes are personal, even if only the slant put on things, and sometimes, like Zy's thread they open up into more. For me ....'simply, I'm free' sums it up now |
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| | | From: Zydha | Sent: 12/18/2008 1:25 AM |
That's a wonderful way to see it, Jen, good on you, Girl, but, lol, I'm stuck with my topic for life, lol...must have been a real bitch in a former life,  This has been a good place for sharing, thanks for doing that, and ... it's how we gain another dimension of who the writer is and why, Zy x |
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