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New Poems Pge 1 : Good Bad Father Husband
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From: LittleBill  (Original Message)Sent: 4/15/2004 3:49 PM
 
 
Good Bad Father Husband 
Summer evenings they’d sit on the porch, he’d smoke 
tell jokes a little out of reach but 
she’d still laugh and he’d smile, steal her a sly wink, 
talk about baseball, football, 
about fields and crops and the weather, 
always the damned weather. 
He was a hard worker she knew, an honest man who cared, 
was proud of his family, 
a man that stood up - would fight if need be. 
He’d drive out to meet her when she missed a bus 
or he’d chase those silly boys from the house if she asked him 
and there was always enough to eat, 
new clothes to wear and sure, 
he’d come home drunk once in a while and get angry 
at her Mother 
but he’d never hurt his daughter or her brothers 
and he’d never stayed out all night and she loved him, 
knew one day she’d marry a man like him. 
A good man, 
just like her Father - 
 
Winter evenings she sits in the kitchen, 
thinks about her Husband, his jokes make her laugh, 
he explains to her the secrets of baseball, football 
talks about his work in the city 
the damned traffic there and back. 
He has a good job now she knows, 
earning well, lavishing her and the girls with gifts 
keeping them in this fine old house in the suburbs. 
Respected around town he loves 
taking his family to those fancy restaurants 
so he can show off his beautiful wife 
and gorgeous little daughters and sometimes 
she feels the silent envy of women 
who consider themselves above her. 
And then she thinks again about her husband, 
who once in a while comes home just a little drunk 
beats her and takes her 
as she bites into a towel so the kids can’t hear 
how she runs home to Mother 
who reveals scars on her own battered skin 
they hold each other and cry. 
And she remembers returning the next day, 
back to the house, 
back to her children, 
back to the Husband who, 
in the dark is a bad man, 
just like her Father. 
©lb04 


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From: LittleBillSent: 4/17/2004 3:43 PM
Thanks Emma, just do me a favour and make sure this doesn't happen to you...ok ?
 
: )lb

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From: LittleBillSent: 4/17/2004 3:45 PM
Hey Zed, thanks for the comments, I believe this is just one rewrite away from being 'good'.....(as always...lol) : )lb

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From: LittleBillSent: 4/17/2004 3:48 PM
Hey Babe, please, don't ever apologise for your poetry - it's far too good and I was very touched by your reply...thanks.....: )lb

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From: MSN NicknameBouncing-FluffSent: 4/17/2004 3:58 PM
Hiya again LB,
 
Yes I will make sure that something like this doesnt happen to me.. or at least i will do my best. I have thoughts in my head as to how my "dream man" should treat me, my expectations arent too high, but i'm a cautious person anyway, so there's a pretty good chance that i'll get to know someone for who they really are before i ever trust them 100%.
 
Thanks again LB, it is a very moving poem. By the way, if you do have a couple of minutes spare on your hands at any point, would you mind just letting me know what you think of "Silent Cries" please? I'd really appreciate it, but you dont have to put yourself out to do so.
 
Lv Fluff.
 
p.s, i have to say that i personally think that this is one of your best poems yet LB.

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From: ShackletonSent: 4/17/2004 8:44 PM
From my point of view - your best ever poem. I enjoy poetry that leads me along gently with a heart-warming tale and then bops me on the nose at the end. This one bopped me on the nose, in the guts and in the heart. Very good poem LB. I found it a bit 'American' again - not a criticism - just a comment. Great stuff! Bye now.

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From: MSN NicknamewildestscarletsunriseSent: 4/20/2004 10:32 AM
Hi Lb,
An excellent poem, illustrating well the  cycle of abuse. I like it a lot, Mari

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From: LittleBillSent: 4/20/2004 4:54 PM
Hi Mari, thanks, I trust the move went well and we can look forward to you posting again ? : )lb

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From: LittleBillSent: 4/21/2004 6:29 AM
Thanks for the comment Mick. : )lb

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From: MSN NicknameForestFlower5893Sent: 4/21/2004 5:20 PM
Hi lb
 
I've read this poem several times now before deciding to make a comment.  To be honest with you this poem really shook me.  It spoke so clearly about the cycle of abuse, how so many from violent homes grow up to be either victims or abusers.  This was a excellent portrayal, breathtakingly sad.  I think one of the best poems I have read.  Well done.  Emma

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From: MSN NicknameBradeneSent: 4/21/2004 7:31 PM
Brilliant poem lb really true to life and i know a dozen or so women who endure husbands like him. Love Val xx

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From: LittleBillSent: 4/21/2004 7:39 PM
Thank you Emma, nothing pleases me more than to know my poetry has 'really' touched a reader...even if it is such a dark subject as this. : )lb

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From: LittleBillSent: 4/21/2004 7:43 PM
Hi Val, thanks for the comments. : )lb

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From: MSN NicknameEvaTS_67Sent: 4/29/2004 10:02 PM
Hi Little Bill!
This poem is fantastic! Amazing writing. You could write a whole book based on this poem! It is so sad though how so many women do actually end up marrying someone just like their father even if their father was a really nasty man.
I also liked your poem "Eating Dirt" - very good description of how a loving relationship can go bad.
Eva

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From: MSN NicknameEvaTS_67Sent: 4/29/2004 10:14 PM
I forgot to mention about Christina's wonderful poem as a reply! So good and heartfelt. Truly enjoyed it and SO glad you got the strength to break away to build a happy life with your son.
Eva

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From: LittleBillSent: 4/30/2004 11:34 AM
Hi Eva....thanks, glad I could provide you with an interesting Midnight read...lol...you're comment to Chrissy is lovely...I'm sure she'd appreciate your kind words. Thanks babe. : )lb

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