Hi Switch,
I would like to work on the dog story.
I think this must somehow be introduced into the introduction paragraphs.
All this stuff was in my head so I didn't even think to included it in the first one.
I was just writing the forethought and not the background resource thinking.
#1
In a far off land a story is told about a very evil man and what might become of his soul should he not fulfill his evolutionary requirements. It is said he will slip back down the great ladder and such a man may be born into the belly of a bitch. If in that life time he has not found the path to enlightenment he will fall to the next lower energy levels, continuing from life to life until he is but as a grain of sand on the beach.
I don't want to point to any one belief system. Only to the idea of reincarnation and the metaphysical nature of the material that is to come. It think I need it to help the reader understand the myth with out a background in Hinduism.
#2
In this same far off land there lives another story of Glory. It tells of a lean monster that was starving and about to consume a man who had thrown himself on the mercy of the Divine One. The Supreme Intelligents was by the nature of mercy bound to rescue the man.
Supreme Intelligents command the lean monster to leave the man alone.
With this command the lean monster cried out.......you made me so hungry, so what shall it eat?
Supreme intelligents said ...Eat yourself.
And so he did as he was commanded...starting with first his own toes he ate himself complete gone right up to his face. Where the Supreme intelligents saw the magnitude of the horror and the complete devotion to his will, He called the lean monster Glory.
It is this glory that fills the holy warriors armor.
He is the best lean monster he can be.
#3
Romans were know to fight with rotties. War dogs. After the fall all the dogs were destroyed except a couple that were smuggled to a town called Rottiwilder Germany.
And from there they have been born again.
#4
It is believed that a dog as well as other animals my give up his energies to ransom the life of a human. Bonded to man, good or evil.
#5
In another part of the world It also is believed that should a body fall too long to the ground it may be inhabited by transient spirits with out bodies of their own. Lower life forms on an evolutionary journey. Also like a soldier eaten by dog may be incorporated into that creatures being. "We are what we eat.", literally.
I guess that makes me one big stew.
these are ideas I am trying to incorporate for full comprehension.
I would also like to find a more powerful ending. I just walked a straight path with the first telling of the story.
Perhaps the woman sitting in front of the fire could fall into an endless sleep (death or dream ) and reawaken on the deck of a star ship encircling the dog star and piloted by Captain Apollo, a strong handsome man with warm dark eyes, that twinkled with a familiar spark....the end.
..........leading to an new adventure.
I am going to do a bit of a rewrite and return with the draft in a bit. later tonight or tomorrow.
You have already read the first telling and can see what a mess it is. I think it would be an interesting short story if properly written.
I will go get to work on it .
thanks again
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